Chapter 1: Blowing the Conch
Ralphs Journal
I could not believe that I have landed on this island. I was immured in these trees. I am not sure if it is actually and island that I am on I kept on asking myself are there other? Soon after a boy about my age come up and ask where the others are. We both started walking toward the water I thought that I might take a quick dip. Surprisingly once I got in it was very warm just like an over-sized bath tub.
Once I got out of the water I found a platform type thing that Iwe could sit on the shade of green felt a lot better then the hot sun beating down on me. I asked this boy what he went by since I just cant call him by boy, he said in a very llow voice like there were peole around saying he was called piggy. I know this was rude but I bursted out in laughter right after he said the word piggy.
Soon after we got to know eachother Piggy spotted a white-ish thing floating in the water we went to go see he pulled it out and immediatly he said this is a rair conch shell you can blow in it. The motif on the shell was beautiful I thought. A few minutes later when I got all the sand out Piggy suggested I blow to see if other boys would come. Ofcourse I blew as hard as I could and then I looked over and saw young boys coming. Some did not have their togs on.
Soon after we met all eachother this other guy Jack and Simon and me went on to go see if it was and island. We ended up on top of the hill looking over the whole island we could see everything, we saw the biggest rock we just had to throw it down so we did it was amazing. Once we were on our way we saw a pig squealing stuck in the efflorescencing creepers. Jack was about to jab it but he wouldn't. We really need food for all these boys
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3 comments:
I really like your first paragraph. Especially how you described the warm water as an over-sized bath tub and how he was immured in the trees. I also like how you said how he bursted out in laughter over Piggy's name. I think that you did a very good post.
I like how you said in the third pargraph that is a rare conch shell. Then in the forth pargraph how you said that you jack and simon went to the hill to see if it was a island or not.
I like it all. you could have described the roack, or the hike up the mountain, or the pig a little more. I like you u said that the conch was rare, and i like how you said that you couldnt just call piggy "boy"
oh ya and please try to get rid of the thing under your blog comments, where you have to right out the wierd letters. no one likes those
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